Hi, my name is Alondra Ramos and welcome to
Gainesville Florida where I have 7 visitor parking spaces in front of my
apartment for my friends and family to use, but they are all
inconveniently taken. Where towing companies make a fortune from
individuals parking where they are not “supposed to” and where scooters
are a more popular choice of transportation because of their size.
Gainesville is a small city not intended to hold
such a big population. And that is why I am proposing building underground
parking garages.
My company, Advanced Construction, would build
the most efficient, ecofriendly, underground parking garages that will
eliminate the need for you to be at the bus stop 40minutes before your
class even starts, will decrease the chances of your car getting towed and
having to pay a $100 dollar fine, and most immortally not being able to
find a parking spot.
I know what most of you are thinking? How do
you even build underground parking garages? Most of
Florida is sadly and below sea level. Well nothing is impossible with modern
technology. Thankfully for us Gainesville is in the heart of Florida where the
land is a little higher. And the key to my company is not digging thousands of
feet underground. We would dig underground for only one level and then expand
to the sides. This will help with the geographical problem as well as the
environmental concerns. Although we might have some challenges ahead for
us, our possibilities can be endless.
Most
of the feedback I’ve received was about questions regarding if this was even
possible. Hence, what I changed based on my feedback was addressing the “how”
concern, and as result I added more information towards the end on my video. It
is it would just take a lot of work and time. And I do believe that with these
circumstances the risks do outweigh the benefits. Gainesville population is
just going to grow over time. All you have to do is look at the U.Fs population
increase in the last couple of year. The university is accepting more students
and more students are wanting to go to college. We also have Santa Fe expanding
their campus attracting more students to the area.
Hey Alondra,
ReplyDeleteI think your idea is really great! I know that I am not the only one that would appreciate more parking not only on campus at the university and in Gainesville. You are right that the population is growing and you have thought of a very innovative to solve this parking issue. I thought your pitch was really good but I think that you should try to memorize more what you have to say instead of reading it word by word. I know it is hard because it was hard for me too but that is the only thing I think you could improve. If you want to see how my second attempt at how my elevator pitch went, here is the link:
http://andreacdona.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no2.html
Hey Alondra,
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of your business! I think it's one of the best I've seen this whole semester. You are right. I am wondering if it is feasible to build such a parking garage. If it is, I would be completely on board with it! Finding enough parking is almost always an issue for me. It is very inconvenient. Your idea would help fix a major need. I only have 2 minor constructive criticisms I would offer. I would try to go off script a little more instead of reading your pitch. I think that will give you a little more energy with your presentation. The other suggestion is really more of a personal preference. I would turn your phone sideways when you record. This will eliminate the black bars on the side and give you a bigger video. Great job! Here is a link to my blog if you're interested:
http://ryangoodsonent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hey Alondra! I would be extremely excited if your company were to come in and create more parking for student and visitors alike. I think that there is definitely a problem with UF's parking system and how inconvenient it is to both students and faculty alike. Many parking spots are parked far away from where you are trying to go. I wish you all the best on your entrepreneurial endeavors. Check out my blog! https://www.blogger.com/blogger.g?blogID=2458344027561127149#allposts
ReplyDeleteHey Alo, your company is marketable to a large group of people. I think it would do really well in a UF setting. Maybe working with student government and past students that tried to curb or help this issue, you would be able to achieve this!
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